- May 22, 2019
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Sorry i'm late to answer, i've just noticed your messageFor the lounge, the choice to take her hand or not does (somewhat) dictate if Edwin is cold or warm to her during their conversation. Although, you might be talking about the hag handy/punishment game scene in the blue room... there I'd argue his disposition is being affected by Sophia's perfume. You can see Edwin's lack of filter in earlier scenes with the aphrodisiac too; he becomes pretty frank when under its affect.
In hindsight, I do think being able to modulate Edwin's tone during the concluding Abel scene would have been appropriate. GIL himself thought it stuck out like a sore thumb when he first read it, as did one of our proofreaders. I maintain that Edwin has sufficient reason to be irritated over the situation, and it's not like he's playing toward an endgame (yet), but he is typically characterized as being mindful around the club's patrons. Him getting a handle on the situation wouldn't be out of character. On the flip side, I also think there's something to be said for him having rare moments of honesty. Everyone reacts emotionally on occasion and he's still a dorky 22-year old kid after all.
Edwin is a pretty well-defined character as far as porn game MCs go, so it's sometimes tricky to discern where it's appropriate to railroad his responses and where to allow the reader to choose how to processes situations and act on them. I appreciate when people point out these incongruities. Multiple gut feelings is useful information when what I'm working off of is a single gut feeling, although obviously I take them with a grain of salt.
I'm not sure yet, but I may just go back and iterate on that scene some to give the player some choice in characterizing Edwin's outward responses. As vague as Abel is in that scene, it's a pretty foundational scene for Edwin going forward, so it bears some consideration.
All your point are completely understandable and honestly i didn't remember Edwin former scene before you pointed it out. Perhaps i wouldn't even have given second thought about Edwin last scene if i did not read up other people concern. I didn't meant it as a critic and the update is reeeally good, don't get me wrong! i was completely drawn by the story all along my playthrough and i've been stating the few bad momentary opinions that i had like a crazy twittos despite all the good one that i could have said.
To add a few hindsight to my last message, what bothered me was that i had the social chameleon trait and i guess a social chameleon would only get mad on purpose, but i certaily put too much into it, you're right, MC's still young.
Anyway, i love your game, keep up the good work, i'll be waiting for the next update!